21st Century 英文报开展内容为“中学生社会实践调查”的征文活动。假设你参加了你校组织的中学生社会实践活动，请你根据以下信息，以“井冈之旅”（A Tour to the Jinggang Mountain）为题，叙述其活动情况。
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时 间：5月1日-5日
交通工具：火车
活动内容：1、参观“希望小学”，了解学习情况；
2、与村民同吃住，了解生活状况；
3、参加田间劳动，体验农民生活。
感 受：1、农民的生活条件改善了；
2、因为政府免学费、众多好心人资助，没有失学学生。
生词：学费：tuition fees
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只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。
文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
1．句子结构的准确性和复杂度
2．短文内容的完整性和连贯性A Tour to the Jinggang Mountain
On May 1st, I participated in a five-day tour organized by our school to the Jinggang Mountain by train. After we got there, first we visited the Hope Primary School, where we got to know the conditions of students’ study in the less developed areas. Soon, we were arranged to live in the houses of local villagers to see what their real life is. There we were able to have meals with them and work in the field to experience the farmer’s life. During the visit, we were excited to find that farmers are living a better life and no children drop out of school because the government pays for their tuition fees and many warm-hearted persons unselfishly sponsor them.
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(答案→)A Tour to the Jinggang Mountain
On May 1st, I participated in a five-day tour organized by our school to the Jinggang Mountain by train. After we got there, first we visited the Hope Primary School, where we got to know the conditions of students’ study in the less developed areas. Soon, we were arranged to live in the houses of local villagers to see what their real life is. There we were able to have meals with them and work in the field to experience the farmer’s life. During the visit, we were excited to find that farmers are living a better life and no children drop out of school because the government pays for their tuition fees and many warm-hearted persons unselfishly sponsor them.
解析：考查提纲作文，考生首先要仔细审题，包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，话题是叙述“井冈之旅”活动情况。要点已经给出。但考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要多使用复杂句，一句话中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：During the visit, we were excited to find that farmers are living a better life and no children drop out of school because the government pays for their tuition fees and many warm-hearted persons unselfishly sponsor them.既有宾语从句，又有状语从句。