假设上周日你和来自美国的朋友Tony去公园野餐，在路上Tony不小心扭伤了左脚，恰好你学校学过这方面的急救知识，及时对Tony进行了急救。请就此事写一篇短文。
内容包括：l.拨打120求救；
2．把Tony的左脚放在一个较舒适的位置；
3．用冰袋冷敷受伤部位15分钟；
4．肿胀减轻后用绷带包扎扭伤部位。
注意：词数100左右。可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Last Sunday , I had a picnic with Tony , my friend from America . Unfortunately , Tony’s left foot got injured on our way to the park. Luckily, I’d just learned about first aid in our school. So I dialed 120 immediately and performed first aid before the doctor came. First, I put his foot on a fortable position. Then I rushed to a shop nearby and fetched bags of ice, and carefully applied the ice to the injury. Fifteen minutes later, the swelling seemed to have gone down a little. And I covered the injury with a clean and dry bandage.
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(答案→)Last Sunday , I had a picnic with Tony , my friend from America . Unfortunately , Tony’s left foot got injured on our way to the park. Luckily, I’d just learned about first aid in our school. So I dialed 120 immediately and performed first aid before the doctor came. First, I put his foot on a fortable position. Then I rushed to a shop nearby and fetched bags of ice, and carefully applied the ice to the injury. Fifteen minutes later, the swelling seemed to have gone down a little. And I covered the injury with a clean and dry bandage.
解析：本篇书面表达属于记叙文范畴，在写作时要充分了解所提供的情景素材，要交待清楚事件发生的时间when、地点where、人物who、发生了什么事what、怎么发生的how、原因why。要按事件发生的先后顺序叙述，做到重点突出，目的明确。 此外还要注意使用恰当的连接词来表示顺序和逻辑关系，使句意表达连贯、语法正确、符合逻辑。此外写作时还要注意，本文叙述自己的一次经历，所以应使用第一人称而且要用一般过去时态。
【亮点说明】本文短小精悍、结构紧凑。作者以事情发生的顺序为时间轴叙述了发生的整个事件，并且使用first 、then以及fifteen minutes later等表示顺序的词和短语，把要点叙述的详略得当，层次清晰。此外unfortunately、luckily、 carefully和immediately等副词的使用给朴实的语言增添了几分感情色彩，不但充分显示了作者的友爱之情，而且也使文章的叙述更为生动形象。