六级作文,麻烦英语高手批阅,修改,t seems that I am ill I am good i

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你这个作文..
语法上的问题我帮你改了～
其它的我不知道怎么修改,因为我真的弄不清楚你在说什么.对不起..
It seems that I am ill.
I am in a good mood,for I have a lot of friends.
However,tonight the bathroom is my home,and I went into the washroom several times.
I am not well.
Besides drinking a bottle of water,I have not ate anything,which means that I will lose weight again.
I am leaving now,but I worry about them,especially the girl.
There are three reasons:She is a little girl,and she is kind.
Most importantly though,I want to know if that place is dangerous for them,especially for her..
I do not understand the world.
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供参考答案1:
兄弟,写文章少写第一人称做主语.否则文章出来的水平只能叫幼稚!另外有些状语从句的用法也有问题. 多读写英文读物,写文章的时候会有些帮助!
供参考答案2:
六级？？？兄弟，不是我说你，写的真不砸地
供参考答案3:
太差了，改出来就不是你自己的了。完全不符合四六级写作要求，看范文吧。